Pacific Garden Mission
February 27, 2007
Grig stirs a third cream into the coffee with his pinky, overtaking a swoop of bubbles and bending them against the styrofoam rim. Shelter coffee. Burnt bitter rust barely above room temperature. The reverend points at the stack of pamphlets, goes on about needle eyes and mustard seeds.
I’m just here for the donuts.
It’s a big room, warped linoleum, a tin ceiling oxidized green at the seams, transoms sealed shut under uncountable layers of paint. A lunch counter or Chinese laundry, seventy years ago. Early spring drizzle is bleeding gray light through the huge storefront window—all window, folding chairs against the radiator running its length. A few drunks still doze on a shot couch, paperback bibles under their folded hands.
All the donuts you want son. All you want. Have a seat.
Grig knows better. Once you sit down the real pitch starts. It’s warm. It’s dry. The leftover chicken kiev and lasagna would be here in a few hours, after the downtown catering services drop off their lunchtime surplus. Sit. Stay.
This is a really effective beginning. Reminds me a little of Bukowski. Sparse irony.
I’m reading the entire blog tonight, and I’m going to leave comments when I feel compelled, so it may start to sound like I’m blowing smoke up your ass, because I’m hardly going to leave a comment if I don’t like something.
I was going to say that I have trouble with fiction and poetry as a way of lending more credence to my positive responses; but I suppose we all have that trouble, and that’s why so aspiring writers get read. There has to be some humane vision from the beginning, I think, and I’m not sure how writers do that. Here it’s something about the pointing to a stack of pamphlets — the reverend’s laissez faire attitude on a matter of faith. And then the strangeness of belief: “needle eyes” and “mustard seeds”. The bleakness of a homeless shelter, where the people trying to help you are also struggling.
I’m trying to say, without subjecting you to unwanted critical advances, you had me at “mustard seeds”.